龔露(蘇州新東方雅思教研組)
真題回放：
小作文：流程圖—玻璃的回收過程
點評：雅思寫作流程圖(包括地圖、示意圖等)在09年上半年一共考過三次，分別是1月15、3月14和6月27日。從這一規(guī)律可以看出，流程圖的重復(fù)頻率大概是每二到三個月出現(xiàn)1次，7月份到9月份小作文小作文主要以table 題為主，9月26號流程圖在沉寂了3個月之后如期而至，這給10月份的烤鴨們提供了一個線索：小作文的備考重心可以放在其他4類圖，即線狀圖，餅狀圖，柱狀圖，表格上。
9月26號的作文考生只要按照流程從頭到尾把玻璃回收的過程寫明白。注意開頭段，主體段，結(jié)尾段的內(nèi)容分布：
開頭段
交代玻璃回收這一過程及回收目的
主體段
準(zhǔn)備工作 具體過程
結(jié)尾段
交代結(jié)果
每段可能用到的語言
開頭段：
The following diagraph shows the structure of……
The picture demonstrates/illustrates……
It mainly consists of……
It works as follows。
It involves following steps。
The whole procedure can be divided into…stages。
中間段：
表示首階段的不同說法：
1) The process starts from +( 名詞or 動名詞)
2) At the first stage , + 句子
3) At the beginning of the circle, +句子
4) During the initial phrase, + 句子
5) The beginning of the whole circle is marked by ( 名詞+ 動名詞)
6) (名詞or 動名詞)is the first step in (+名詞or 動名詞)
表示次階段的不同說法：
1)The second stage is (+名詞or 動名詞)
2)The next stop in the process is (+名詞or 動名詞)
結(jié)尾段：
表示最后階段的不同說法：
1) (名詞or 動名詞)is the last step in the procedure。
2) The final phase in the procedure is about +(名詞or 動名詞)
3) In the final phase ,+ 句子
4) Entering the final stage ,+句子
5) (名詞or 動名詞) is the final stage。
大作文：高中畢業(yè)生在受大學(xué)教育之前以旅游或工作的方式步入社會的利與弊
In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of young people who decide to to this。
點評：此文和劍5 Test 2上提供的范文一模一樣，屬教育類。教育類的考題出鏡率一直居高不下。因此，烤鴨們在備考時絕對不容小覷，本文可采用對稱式的寫法來展開，下面就本題提供參考思路。
第一段：交代背景和寫作目的，3句話。
第1句：近年來關(guān)于高中生畢業(yè)之后是選擇工作或旅行一年還是直接進(jìn)入大學(xué)這一問題引起了人們很大的爭論(spark heated controversy)
第2句：關(guān)于這一舉措有人贊成有人反對
第3句：本文的目的在于探討該舉的利與弊(explore its pros and cons)。
第二段：探討休學(xué)一年旅游或工作的好處，9句話。
第1句：there are numerous advantages of stepping into the society for one year before advanced study。
第2-5句：To begin with, 畢業(yè)生選擇旅行能夠開闊他們的視野，了解世界各地不同的自然景觀和人文景觀，提高他們對生態(tài)環(huán)境的保護(hù)意識以及文化包容度，這對于他們返校之后對于專業(yè)的理解和認(rèn)識會更深。同時，學(xué)習(xí)的使命感也更大。(2句：Touring for one year enables newly graduates to gain a broader perspective towards the world.3句：Stricken by the magnificent natural and human landscape,these young adults will attain higher levels of environmental awareness and world peace consciousness. 4句：As the further they explore the natural world and diverse cultures, the deeper understanding these youth will earn towards our mother nature and exotic ethnicities.5句：By the time they return to the classroom,the sense of mission becomes so strong that their appreciation and comprehension of the major will far-outweigh their peers。)
第6-9句：As a further illustration,畢業(yè)生選擇工作為他們積累了寶貴的工作經(jīng)驗，同時也為他們贏得暫時上的經(jīng)濟(jì)獨(dú)立，更重要的是工作能夠幫助他們更好地規(guī)劃自己未來的職業(yè)生涯。相對于同齡人而言，他們因為能夠體會工作的艱辛從而珍惜求學(xué)機(jī)會的來之不易；因為親身經(jīng)歷職場從而能更清醒地認(rèn)識到市場的需求；因為經(jīng)歷了工作時的酸甜苦辣從而知道自己的優(yōu)勢和劣勢領(lǐng)域?；氐綄W(xué)校之后，他們能夠更加有針對性的學(xué)習(xí)自己在職場上所缺失的技巧和知識。(6句：Entering the job market means the outset of their working-experience accumulation,temporary economic independence and sounder career planning.7句： To be more exact,these young people will go through all kinds of tribulations and hardships that they will never encounter on campus.8句：This,in return, informs them of the skills and techniques required by the working sphere as well as their own specific strengths and weaknesses.9句：In this circumstance,rejoining the campus does not only mean earn a university degree,but further enhancing their employability and marketability。)
第三段：探討該舉措的壞處，4句話。
第1句：Accordingly,there also exists some drawbacks which we may not neglect。
第2-3句：To start with, 畢業(yè)生們由于缺乏涉世經(jīng)驗而容易受浮華世界的誘惑繼而無心求學(xué)。(2句：High school graduates may be tempted by material richness of the mundane world that they will be distracted from their normal study.3句：Furthermore, they may become so pragmatic and practical that myriads of campus enjoyments and freshness will be deprived from them。)
第4句：畢業(yè)生由于在學(xué)校壓抑過久以及心智不成熟，馬上步入社會有可能會上當(dāng)受騙或者由于自律能力不強(qiáng)而誤入歧途(In addition, teenagers may be depressed for so long a time that hasty entry into the society will result in their unbridled behaviour and some of the extremists may go so far as to commit crimes and betray the law。)
第四段：總結(jié)全文，2句話。
第1句：綜合以上觀點，指出高中畢業(yè)生花一年時間旅游或積累經(jīng)驗既有好處又有壞處。(To conclude, walking into the society either in the forms of traveling or working bears boons and banes。)
第2句：正確的做法是在好處與壞處之間取得一個平衡。(what we need to do is to strike a delicate balance between its advantages and disadvantages。)
